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December 31, 2012
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Posted at: 02:56 PM | Permalink
Poem for Practice Critique
December 31, 2011
Lullaby
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Lay your sleeping head, my love, Human on my faithless arm; Time and fevers burn away Individual beauty from Thoughtful children, and the grave Proves the child ephemeral: But in my arms till break of day Let the living creature lie, Mortal, guilty, but to me The entirely beautiful. Soul and body have no bounds: To lovers as they lie upon Her tolerant enchanted slope In their ordinary swoon, Grave the vision Venus sends Of supernatural sympathy, Universal love and hope; While an abstract insight wakes Among the glaciers and the rocks The hermit's carnal ecstasy. Certainty, fidelity On the stroke of midnight pass Like vibrations of a bell And fashionable madmen raise Their pedantic boring cry: Every farthing of the cost, All the dreaded cards foretell, Shall be paid, but from this night Not a whisper, not a thought, Not a kiss nor look be lost. Beauty, midnight, vision dies: Let the winds of dawn that blow Softly round your dreaming head Such a day of welcome show Eye and knocking heart may bless, Find our mortal world enough; Noons of dryness find you fed By the involuntary powers, Nights of insult let you pass Watched by... |
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(47) Drunk
February 16, 2007
Drunk It was late Sunday afternoon when I went out to the park. The backyard of my house is the park, so this wasn’t very hard. Most of our neighbors have fences between their yards and the park, but my dad doesn’t want to do that. We don’t have a pool for drunk teenagers to stumble into, and with all the banana trees everywhere, it’s not so easy to tell that there isn’t a fence. I was wearing my old rollerblades. They have these purple plastic wheels that make for a bumpy ride, but they’re light so I can pretend to do jumps and sweet tricks like I see on TV. I started around the path, smiling at all the happy people. Everyone is happy in the park, don’t you know? Here are the pot-smoking college students wearing Birkenstocks, there is the young family, full of hope and brimming with the prospect of the life ahead. On second thought, the dad looks scared shitless. Techno is injected into my ears through my snazzy new tape player. I am a firm believer in the power of good techno music. It is the accurate heartbeat of society. I skate...
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(46) Life Imitating Art
February 15, 2007
Life Imitating Art
Beijing Talks stalled. Chinese fire drill? Or greatest threat to national security ever? You decide. Next on FOX News.
The audio from the television set harmonized with the laboring of the air-conditioning compressor to form a slow, dull vibration. Entropy was the order of the day- the inevitable decay of order into chaos. Distinct speech was unrecognizable. The righteous indignation of the intellectuals-for-hire was reduced to so much white noise, electronic detritus. Joseph Kessler saw the image on the screen, now distorted beyond all recognition, reflected at the bottom of what remained of a gin and tonic. As he sat there, Bogart-esque in his meditations, he could feel every nerve, every synapse even, synchronize with this vibration. He would have been in Nirvana, but for the blinding headache and deepening sense of existential angst.
“So, what do you want your last words to be?” His reverie ended with all the abruptness of a defibrillator-terminated near death experience. Having reentered the here-and-now, Kessler was greeted by Julia Kaczynski- long time acquaintance and source of sexual frustration. Her voice was tinged with the kind of affected, world-weary cynicism worthy of any film noire femme fatale.
“What...
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(45B) Too Lazy To Put a Title on this Sonnet
February 14, 2007
Too Lazy to Put a Title on this Sonnet
If fate goes as the seasons bloom
Rises and falls like the ship’s boon
Then sail away with me, and be my all
And we shall live forever, while stardust fall
If one day I stand at the top of the world
Then be my queen, and sit on thy throne
But if I were to become a beggar, too
Would you hold my hand, and live it through?
If the world fell into chaos and destruction
Would you stand with me, and rise from the ruin?
If you said yes to these things and more
Then a little winter might not seems so sore
And if you truly meant that you loved me
Then I truly give my heart to thee
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(45A) Untitled
February 14, 2007
Untitled
The sign glowed with a crimson flush, fluorescence against grey backdrop. Ponsetti’s Shoes, it read. Curvy letters that scripted and flowed unto the next, no logo or sign symbolic of recognition. Just two simple words. Yet two words that carried more meaning than any enterprising corporation. Ponsetti’s Life, maybe it should have read. Or Ponsetti’s Last Hope. A stranger in name and intent. A lone wolf in a pack of lions.
I saw him as I passed by his shop, as simple as the store name. Two tanned walls flank a set of chairs. Two tanned walls of little rubber-soled wrappings, unrecognizable in shape or form save in the mind of the old man kneeling before a child not more than four or five years of age in one of the chairs. His father towered above his legacy, and eagerly expected the old man to finish with his fitting. He pointed a finger at the shoe the child wore and waved it as if such material were not fit for such infant high fashion. The old man, paper ruler in hand, scooted closer to the child like a buffoon before his prince, and stared through his thick round glasses...
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(44) Doom
February 13, 2007
Doom
The final war ends with one last resound,
When stars and the earth together collide.
Soldiers without names lie dead on the ground
With naught but battle hot blades at their sides.
The King, now dethroned, will evil replace
With dissension marked by his scaled skin.
And in vengeance, death will the earth deface,
For forced existence as the spawn of sin.
If bards and fools left hold freedom of tongue
Their lyrics will be of the darkest sort
A worser tale than we from Eden flung
Mankind’s dreaded fate will be their report:
“The Kingdom of Heaven is split in twain,
Death and destruction are all that remain.”
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(43D) Jealousy
February 12, 2007
Jealousy
My hands they burn
with clenched-fist love
rivulets of bloodlust
slipping through my fingers
from moondrunk half-crescents,
like my precariously hoarded heart,
and my self-proscribed rationality
-all lost in the haze
of trauma-induced incapacitation.
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(43C) Bound
February 12, 2007
Bound
Were you the leaping flame,
Winding insidiously into the essence, the weakness
The tinder heart
Every movement silhouetted, echoed, shaded
A delayed caress
The bright aching burning center of the fire
Deepening the Shadow: that wavering emptiness.
Be it the burning wick, or the pure funeral pyre,
Be it the forest fire or the desolation of a crumbling home
The spontaneously combusted lover
Burning up and burning down in fury, love
Or absence thereof:
Frustration ignited.
One step away, one behind
Shadows exist only in the wake of truer things
Epitomizing the burnt out hollow, the used thing
Essential and ignored
A shadow makes it real, grounding it,
The third dimension, self-sacrifice.
Twisting and curling
Smoke spiraling into existence
Jut as incidental
As
Me
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(43B) Temple
February 12, 2007
Temple
Empty avenues stand before me
Their height s and depths all open-
Every step a measure in Grace.
“O how the mighty have fallen”
Who now are so declined.
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